(no one has to know)

A short poem asking what a person would be willing to do if no one was watching. Would true feelings come out?

(no one has to know)

If I cornered you in the abandoned bathroom,

would you kiss me?

 

If I locked all the exits and turned out the lights,

would you kiss me?

 

If I claimed to be another,

would you kiss me?

 

If time froze for one moment,

would you kiss me?

 

If our lives wouldn’t change,

would you kiss me?

 

If I kissed you,

 

would you kiss me?

Reviews

[Kaden Sylvers]

Wow, this is so raw and direct, un-shy. Awesome poem. =)

[Coyote Poetry]

I like this poem. The question is direct and to the point. The flow of words moved with a good movement. I like the ending. A excellent poem.

Coyote

[Jamie Taylor]

I Really Liked This Poem :D

[Rhonda]

that was cool especially the way it was diagonally.

[Rachelle]

I love it. I probably would kiss someone who was that romantic.

[N/A]

I like your flourish with your words and way you have chosen to emphasise them.Also,your layout is pleasing, it seems to (might be wrong here) show a kinda of internal dialogue, like if your asking yourself.
All in all,good write. Xx

[Jeannie Wilder]

Again, I like your fine touches with the words... also the secret atmosphere of this. nice nice!

[atom]

Another good one. Again, really like the editing and how you make "would you kiss me?" pop out diagonally.