She was a fine maiden of thirty years At the table playing cards He, the dark stranger who had come A gentleman of kind regards.
He had lost his way in the Hook Head fog As did many a traveller before Some say on horseback, more by sea The truth in the fog of time is known no more.
Laws of Whist " the devil often features in tales of this game being playedAs the time wore on her heart was lost It is said, as the whist games were won, A card dropped by her showed his cloven feet: He was no mortals son!
A scream she let, in a puff of smoke he went It was the devil himself who stole The heart of Amy Loftus As he played for her very soul!
She lost her mind, poor Amy To the Tapestry Room was confined Until she died she madly cried In language broad and unrefined.
By some its said she can be seen In a stiff dress to a closet in the corner to walk More say the devil comes to attack those in the bed Such is the local tales and talk.
More say a skeleton once upon a time Behind the closet it was found Was it her " or was it him That was not buried in sacred ground?
She loved well, as well did he, Her family disapproved Was he murdered and hidden in the Tapestry room? The truth will never be known or proved…
We know poor Amy lost her mind Broken hearted, maybe with fear His ghost malevolent, her’s is not Should either of them appear.
Some slept while the room had a bed Tales of each apparition was seen Fr Thomas Broaders exorcised the house Bar to the Tapestry Room where she confined had been.
It had been changed to a billiard room How had her spirit taken it, it was inquired She made an awful racket with the billiard balls The changes her rage had fired!
Today, Loftus Hall is torn down Another house stands in its stead The locals tell tales to strangers now Of the lovers, the devil and the dead!
Loftus Hall under seige in Cromwellian Times while home to the Redmond Family
Stories that have travelled down the years are often the best.
You have done a good job on this tale.
It reads well but I found, in some of the longer lines, the metre was a bit off-beat. Clever rhymes and you give tension in the poem which is reflected in the last two lines. Nicely done.
Amazing story written my friend. I liked the old places and the old stories told by the local people. I enjoyed the complete tale and thank you for reading and the comment.
Coyote
oh my...reminds me of those monsters hiding under the bed or in the closet...
and how we can barter or make friends with the devil in order to satisfy our appetite for immediate gratification.
nicely done...great meter.
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I'm not the best at metre but this one came together fairly well! Glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for re.. read moreI'm not the best at metre but this one came together fairly well! Glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for reading!
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