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Six word story

parted lips

whispered cries

wife's away

Author's Note

Haven't uploaded anything in a while since I'm working on my novella. A bit of spontaneity.

I was thinking of Hemmingway's original six word story. "For sale: Baby Shoes. Never worn." Not a statement or a simple action like so many others that I've seen, just an image which tells so much. This is my attempt to create something in that vein.

Reviews

[Jasmine]

Easy to understand. Very much in the spirit of Hemmingway I think.

[Chris]

Many thoughts echo inside. I did read and understand the Author's Note. It's almost a challenge to try the same - and thoughts shift away. You chose the words well.

[Mockingbird]

suggests two people involved in an illicit affair.

[Sami Khalil]

Short but good...Thank you for sharing...:)....................

[Ranger Nadaly]

First sight, Thought "God damn this is gonna be some over dramatic crap" But then reading it again, it was pretty heart stopping. Not too complicated to understand, and the title fits wonderfully.
Nice.

[FocusedAmnesia]

Powerful in its simplicity!

[Cassiopia Summers]

This is a well written piece of writing. I think Hemingway would have been proud.

[The Fisher King]

The poem is elegantly simplistic! I love it :) Nicely done

[CBH]

Intersting. I've never heard a poem like this before. That's a compliment:)