Let me out

Very first on here

A wall,
Standing tall.

Night is cold,
Lives were sold,
Many stories told.

Break the wall,
Light a fire,
Fly and fall,
Burning desire.

Author's Note

What do you think?

Reviews

[dan]

The wall seems to be preventing your heart and mind from reaching new destinations, new stories to tell. By breaking that wall your poetic spirit is freed to roam unencumbered, gathering ideas and inspiration, a burning desire to stretch its wings. Nicely done. take care...dan

[A writer]

thank you.

[:o]

I would like to see you get a little more specific. I'm not sure what lives were sold means nor fly and fall?

[Joshua Carl Cruz]

I don´t follow honestly. Maybe I´m not yet poet enough to undesrstand everything. Whats the rhyme scheme? And I have to ask is this about the Night´s Watch?

[A writer]

What is there to follow? and I've got no clue what is "Night's watch"
Thanks for the visit.

[Joshua Carl Cruz]

Look, no offense was intentioned which obviously you´ve taken up. I was asking for insight but if that´s too sensitive a subject I guess you´re welcome and good luck with your stuff.

[potato]

I really liked this poem.It is short, yet powerful. This speaks to me.

[A writer]

Thank you :)

[Kajal Sharma]

great rhyming....its true somewhere we all are just trapped inside a wall...and we want to be free

[A writer]

Thank you so much :)

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmi..]

I read hope in this, after all the damage and pain there is a little hope left. I honestly was inspired. Thank you for the share

[micky]

The flow is great and the wording is excellent ...well done :)

[A writer]

Thank you. :)

[luvs2write]

With few words, you let your reader wonder about the rest...very nice poetry. I like it. You should definitely keep writing.

[A writer]

Thank you :) I will.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

So short, but so powerful. I love this piece.

[A writer]

I was waiting for an opinion coming from a great writer. And i just got it. Thank you.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

I should be the one thanking you. You are more than welcome.

[Costa Siwale]

yeah! i like short piercing poetry, and this is exactly that. well written Writer

[A writer]

Thank you. You just made my day :)

[Costa Siwale]

sure, anytime Writer