Final Goodbye

I give up...

 

 

It has been a very long and sad week,

trying to think about what I want to seek.

Been fighting for what seems like a hopeless cause,

been walking around feeling so lost.

Feeling helpless as if my heartbeat is dying,

no more incenttive to be miracle defining.

I can't forget the actions that give me guilt,

destroying the foundations that I well built.

 

Yet your bittersweet memory remains on my mind,

remembering all the sacrifices I put on the line.

Thinking about our very first passionate kiss,

nothing less than being in deep, deep bliss.

Holding you in my tight welcoming embrace,

this is just something i can never erase.

 

I remember sitting under the bright night,

happy and hopeful for the newly discovered light.

That night, i said the words "I love you"

and I romised I would never let you go too.

During this, I was holding tight to your hand,

preparing to hang on as long as I can.

 

My love grew for you time after time,

you made my heart beat just like a rhyme.

Even though at times, you almost made me break.

I kept fighting even through all my heartache.

I kept remembering the promise of never letting go,

even though I was tired of going against the flow.

 

Through all of the challenges we fought together,

I thought that through it all, it would last forever.

Even though we could not hang on to each other anymore,

still it is you that I love and care deeply for.

I made my sacrifice, and I took the painful fall.

But to me, I really didin't care about the pain at all.

 

To many I am just stupid and walking blind,

but to me I am just loving and kind.

Now that I'm alone and looking at the bright blue sky,

I take one deep breath, and whisper my final goodbye.

Reviews

[John Stussy]

Your endurance for that romance is to be highly commended, it takes a different kind of person to be able to try like that. Then to come back and write this well done poem is even better. The rhyme and rhythm flowed this piece along very smoothly, and kept the reader focused on what you were saying. This is a great poem.

[Yeni]

the third paragraph down
you miss spelled promise

[jex]

This is a very beautiful piece. Lots of emotion and it flows excellently.

Excellent writing.

[C. Porter]

This is a really good write! The emotion is expressed very well, and I really like it!

[Ellen Hammond]

What an beautiful, emotion packed, bitter/sweet, poem! Well penned and a pleasure to read. Thanks for sharing this one with me.

[Akina]

great writing, I really loved it.
you have written it so beautiful and with a nice flow and with good rhymes. this is really good and just so wonderful. your a really amazing writer. thanks for sharing.

Akina :)

[..R.I.P..]

I liked this, the flow of emotion is so well balanced and everything flows well to paint a picture in the readers mind.
Great write.

Thanks for sharing.
xoxo
~JaniK