Missing You

Just a free write

Your face like a reoccuring dream,

　

A smile that I fall in love with again and again.

　

Those hands should'nt be so far away...

They should be right here, embracing mine.

　

You...

 

 

Are the sunrise to my morning,

the bright moon to my night sky,

the reason behind my smile...

 

 

No words can describe how I feel for you,

but 3 words can come close...

 

 

 

"I LOVE YOU..."

 

 

Come home back to me soon...

 

I miss my mornings,

I miss my nights,

I miss my smile...

 

 

 

Reviews

[Matthew Kult]

A dance with words that turns into something beautiful. Very good read. Very pure and I do love the twist in emotions at the end. Great flow but "Come home Back to me soon...." came off a little off to me. Words switched or is this how it is suppose to read?

[OkieWonKenokie]

I love this. I so relate to this most days. Lovely write.

[Liza]

what sweet declaration of longing and admiration

[profile deleted]

this is how i feel about Gerrard being in Afghanistan... Great write! Love it!

[Marlena]

The longing behind this piece is what makes it. However, the first word, "you're" should be "your", and you forgot the apostrophe in "shouldn't". They take away from the seriousness of the work- aside from them, good job.

[Ladysue]

Beautifully expressed and I can feel the longing...nice ending...well penned...

[Manda]

Aww I simply loved this! It was full of heartfelt emotions for the love that you are missing dearly! It will soon be ok again, well at least I hope it will! I love the poems you write! They are also so rateable! Well done once again!!!! =)

[biggle]

that is cute, i liked it :)

[Randolf Ramos]

To be without someone you care is devastating. The trauma of longing for someone that you care to be with is cataclysmic. Time will tell that you will be with each others hand somehow.... great poem...

[deeps]

Heartfelt write and wonderful