Two Ways

Laughing with you humorous
Smiling with you happy
Winking at you flirtatious
Complimenting you sappy

Dreaming in your eyes
Sliding on your skin
Living for your body
Dying in a kiss

Beauty is inside
Beauty is outside
You make me happy
In two ways not one
 

Reviews

[Shannon K.]

I enjoyed this. I like the roughness of it. I tihnk the raw rough texture of this poem works really well with the mood you are almost trying to create. THis undying affection for someone. I like the layout of the first line, how it doesn't really sound right reading it straight, but it sounds good when you think about what it is your reading.
Great job,
S.k.

[Blueyedreamer]

good one ben
makes me think of when i first met my wife, how (sappy) we were too

i kinda wanted to see another verse though but that could just be me i like things even untill they get up to 5 or 6 than it all hits the fan

[Maria Retz]

I like it :-)

[J D Roland]

I like the way the first stanza pulls the reader in, then engages the reader to understand why Two Ways. Nice work.

[Gandré]

cute, cute and a feel-well poem.

[J.P. Bristow]

Dying in a kiss ....................I love that line so textured----lovely to read.

[Katie B]

I like this poem. It simple and flows well. Nicely done.

[Nihad Dweidary]

Nice poem about how fun it could be with one you understand and like a great deal. I like the second stanza. In it playfulness comes into full swing. I am all for being senually attached to the object of one's affection. Nice job! -Nihad

[Julie Murphy, Julie Des..]

It may be raw, as you note, but it is perfect in my opinion. Simple, charming, and adoring! Sound like you are one very blessed man!

[Melissa M.]

Raw? How so? I like this just as it is. I think it really says a lot, and says it well.