What I saw Today

(Today)

Today I saw a fish

Yesterday I saw death

Tommorow I'm going to see me

 

 (Yesterday)

Today I saw death

Yesterday I saw you

Tommrow I'll see a fish

 

 (Tommrow)

Today I saw me

Yesterday I saw a fish

Tommrow I'll see life

 

 (Today)

Today I saw life

Yesterday I saw me

Tommrow I'll scrape a knee

 

 (Tommrow)

Today I scraped a knee

Yesterday I saw life

Tommorw I'll go scene

 

 (Yesterday)

Today I went scene

Yesterday I scraped a knee

Tommrow I'll tell you that you just wasted time reading a stupid poem I hate >:D

 

Author's Note

Tell me who read it all. Be honest. OH! Did you laugh or get a little angry that you wasted your time?

Reviews

[Archia]

I gotta laugh at that last line, I really gotta. It was really confusing, I was thinking there some some paradoxial thing to it or something, but I actually get it know. Oh I can't get over that last line, I loved it. I think it was a great idea. And hey, it didn't waste my time at all, it gave me a laugh.

[Jeffery-Maximilian-Kolb..]

I think this is a really cute poem and it kind of shows the turmoil and confusion of life in General. This was an enjoyable read and a Wonderful write. Thank you for letting me read it.

[jennifer little]

good poem

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Interesting concept, but if you twist it a little it could be brilliant.

[Heromen Selena]

Awesome! That was very creative and I respect people who try to make something serious fun and entertaining. I think if someone was having a bad day and then they read this that it would make their day a little brighter. We defiantly need more poets like you that make people feel better by reading your writing. And I admit, I did read it all, but it made me laugh at the end. Nice job!

[Lina Grey]

I read it all. I laughed. It didn't seem like a waste of time, though. I like the concept of time and if you were to write a serious poem (as opposed to this pointless one) like this, it would probably be worthwhile. Good job, though. Thank you.

[Bailey B.]

I had to stop after the first stanza and read it over again because it made my brain hurt a lil lol. But it made me laugh and I liked the yesterday, today, and tomorrow scheme

[Mockingbird]

i read it forward and backward. either way i enjoyed it. it reminds me of 'waiting for godot' . very creative. actually has a nice rhythm. i did not feel it was a waste of time. nice piece.

[Careless Whispers ._.]

i read more than half honestly...i stopped cuz it started to hurt my brain :) lol i got angry for a second cuz it hurt my brain :O
but over all, very good and........confusing.....i made my brother read it and he laughed :D

GOOD JOB!!!!

[Who Cares]

I have to say this was fairly entertaining. I read through the whole thing and I was pretty mad that there was no point but I laughed. I love your concept, "today, tomorrow, yesterday" it was creative and I think perehaps you should use that concept in a deeper writing it would get great reviews.

[kingblaq]

Nice one. ~phew~ I finally laughed today