I Worship You

I wrote this in school. This one is published. But some critics said it sounded like a bad VNV Nation rip-off. Tell me what you think please. It's one of my firsts.

I worship you
Your eyes the purest blue
I worship you to the end
Silky lips of violent red
I worship your every gentle touch
No such thing as way too much
I worship the way you look at me
The depth of your love: vast as the sea
I will forever worship you
Until the life is violently ripped from me

Reviews

[luke312]

Again this too is good i can't agree with the critics they blind like you don't know