Cosmic View

Cosmic chaos concealing so much,
Infinity of darkness expanding,
Whilst our mortal lives are grinding,

Moments of starlight,
Twinkle through the clouds,
Just try to ignore,
The throngs of noisy crowds,

Mysterious cosmic forces,
Within a universal dream,
So much is not what it seems,

With luck you may experience,
Shooting stars or moments of love,
But too much idle star gazing,
Distracts from active striving,

We're cosmic dust in the greater scheme,
But we are where we are,
And love is the greatest dream,

When two minds & bodies become one

✨🌙

Author's Note

Can you relate to this, in one or more different ways?

Reviews

[Eilis]

I find the idea of dark matter fascinating and unsettling at the same time. I feel you’re alluding to that at the beginning here—all the space inhabited by dark matter. But it’s just one of the mysterious things in our immediate and wider environment that is difficult to experience with our senses but, still, it exists.

I feel like your poem is reaching towards the many known mysteries and then toward the unknown because there is always more to know, to experience.

I liked the way you moved from the macro picture of cosmic reality to the micro reality of individual lives. The significance of each person’s life feels absolute to the individual but in the large scale picture the individual can look like one of those specks of star dust. A sense of perspective can work both ways. It can make us more curious and it can also be humbling. Both things are good.

And the sense of wonder you express in the poem is such an important part of a meaningful human existence. I like how the poem encourages readers to participate in that wonder, to embrace curiosity.

[Twilight]

Thankyou, for another most excellent review. You almost always, manage to add more unique insights of your own. Your reviews and comments, will always be most welcome. We have enjoyed Christmas itself, and now awaiting a visit from my nephews; later today. Just a tiny event, in the "cosmic scheme of things"; as they say. And yet, how instinctively; we all tend to put family life first? Understandably, and it has the other key value; of helping provide structure for our lives? But, I have digressed. Best wishes, Ellis.

[Şenay]

What a beautifully expressed poem.

İn the grand scheme of things, nothing matters. Everything that we do, all that we do, just seems so minuscule & insignificant, when seen from the bigger picture of everything.
There are so much things in this world that we do not know and can not see.

Enjoyed reading it very much, thank you for sharing.

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

this definitely speaks to me. i always wonder about our place in the universe, and i always to think to myself what an incredible universe this is. we are stardust recognising our own brilliance. how wonderful it is to be alive. yet, we still feel lonely, sometimes. and finding a companion to admire the view with... something im working on. thanks for sharing.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I loved this. Firstly, I loved the metaphor of the cosmos in comparison to the human experience of life and secondly, the conveyed message of hope. Very nicely wrought. F.

[Twilight]

Yes. Thanks, Fabian.

[Efxaris Arampatzi]

What a lovely poem! This beautifully contrasts the vastness of the universe with the human experience, highlighting moments of beauty like starlight and love. It encourages us not to get lost in daydreams, but to strive toward meaningful connections and goals. Great job!

[lov]

wow, more people have to see this! this is what I call great poetry!

your words are calming and soft yet so abstract and relating, leading to a point of understanding what you are trying to say, not trying, preaching to us!

Is love really just luck? Like seeing a shooting star?
Or are we just looking in the wrong places? Like looking to the ground, missing a hundred shooting stars, when all we have to do is to look up?

[Twilight]

That's a positive and encouraging, review. Thanks. You seem to understand my writing, so far I have also added some short stories, on here. Best wishes.

[Pryde Foltz]

We are indeed cosmic dust and yet the mind of our dusty debris is capable of containing the whole cosmos. We are beings of contrast. Physically minute but capable of almost infinite mental expansion. The trick as this fine write emphasized is maintaining the balance between both:)

[Twilight]

Balance is important, in so many different aspects of life.