Swing

Poem inspired by the song Ikue Asazaki by Obokuri Eeumi. It really improves the read dramatically.

Still painting,
Won't you come to life?
If I dream of songs
Never Sung, will you
Give me a vision of vacant strife?

Sing painting, like violins.
Imagine a world in motion,
Leave the world something more,
Echoes of a long lost cause,
Naught more than a distant notion
Teaming with unrealized hopes.
Life happens once, painting,
You must surely wish to swing?

Still painting,
Won't you come to life?
If I dream of songs
Never Sung, will you
Give hope in motion, stirring life?

Author's Note

I sincerely hope you enjoyed the work. It, like the rest, was from the heart.

Reviews

[PoemsbyPatrick]

This is a good solid write and excellent construction. Beginnings of setting your feelings down in writing, but I encourage you to let yourself go a bit more. Delve deep into your emotion and give us part of you.

[Shaylynn H.]

It's well written and concise.
I didn't feel much while reading it but I didn't dislike it, so that's something.