Sample A

Almost always

Never not

Allowing all the

Negating negations to

Authentically assemble

Themselves

Perched up teasing

Halfway pleasing

Pushing the unskilled procedure

That’s never an actual

Method of satisfaction

But a delusional

Result of

Inhibited wanting

Turned into a needing

Physical transaction

Two human canvases

Scoped out

Immaculate

Peeling through the flesh

Untouched

Pressure underscored

Maybe this physical

Desire

This emotional

Escapade

Of sorts

Will grow even more

As the furnace

Is scorched

Relief formulating

Between her thighs

As I’m stroking

That reprise

Reprieve

Relief

 

 

Finally achieved

 

 

 

Reviews

[Fade]

Very nice work. I like how you've treated the subject matter, and the meter of the piece. Loved the lines:

"Pushing the unskilled procedure
That�s never an actual
Method of satisfaction
But a delusional
Result of
Inhibited wanting
Turned into a needing
Physical transaction "

Though we feel sexy, powerful in the heat of things, sometimes it's chimera... just us wanting enough to believe whatever.

I liked the rhymes, and the alliteration that you've scattered in the poem as well. It really adds to the flow.

[Raef C. Boylan]

Very nice capture of this act.
"Allowing all the
Negating negations to
Authentically assemble
Themselves" - i like when alliteration works for the flow, as opposed to being a distraction.

"Pushing the unskilled procedure
That�s never an actual
Method of satisfaction" - improvising unconventional pleasure. I'm relating.

The formatting is well-crafted too: culminating in repeats of single words (rhythmic beat=appropriate), followed by a long pause and a triumphant ending - i liked this part; it's skilfully done.

Thanks for sharing this one.

[lostintheworld]

yeah at last
so
in person
finish
at last

lol

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

A great read.. starry night.. this poem was meant for a starry night.. two lovers at last united..

chloe