Dance

An odd little piece...

I take your hands into mine
With a rush of blind bliss
Staring past your deep eyes
Your smile paining me

"What am I to you?"
You shake your head
"You needn't ask.
You already know that."

I grab hold of your throat
Indenting my fingers
"Tell me what I am.
What am I to you?"

Your eyes are shook with fear
And my heart with fury
I rip away from you
Searching for an answer

Why can't I breathe?
I have lost all sight
And I cry out for someone
Scratching out my eyes

You hold out a hand
As I am about to scream
Taking me in your grasp
Your eyes filled with sorrow

The music fades from my ears
And I reach for your hair
To remember warmth
But you flinch away

I fall to the floor
As I feel your breath dissolve
And leave my presence
My eyes dried from the air

I reach to my own throat
With trembling fingertips
"What am I to you?"
I scream to the empty room

My hands hit the cold floor
Tears refusing to form
As my breath begins shortening
And I release

My vision returns
Painful consciousness arises
Regrets lingering, muted
I can hear your voice softly

A song to my aching ears
As your hands wrap around me
Sorrow in your eyes
And tears beginning to drip

"You know what you are."
I grasped the hem of your shirt
Cringing at the empty words
And looking into your eyes

"Remind me."
I begged, grief rising in my chest
"Why can't I feel full?"
My fist hitting the pillow

Your eyes close slowly
And you held out your hand
A smile forming on your lips
"Dance with me."

I take the steps towards you
And begin our dance
With sorrow and nearby hope
Whispering somewhere

Whispering in our hearts
As we danced for each other
The reasons bubbling
Waiting for us to find them

I could soon hear my own heartbeat
As I never had before
I could taste your sweet aroma
And the grief you had been caused

We began to weave our dance
With the memories of hardship
Creating our world together
Where our sins were washed away

Our tears would serve as cures
For each others pain
And we would dance forevermore
Our sorrow singing along

Reviews

[Caradoc]

An interesting poem, an interesting story. Perhaps I am the only one who sees this in your poem, but it appears to me a tale of Avarice defeated by Charity. Nicely allegorical in my opinion.

A dance together to alleviate suffering, a dance together to rediscover joy. Perhaps I misunderstand...perhaps not. Still...

Alluring...

[Veritatis Cupitor]

Truly an amazing piece.

With the title and 1st stanza, I was expecting some fun, lovey- romantic type thing.. but then the 3rd stanza comes along and throws me for a loop. An unexpected storyline, a nice surprise, and very well written. also, much emotion exuding from this piece...you really understand the power of words and the power of storytelling. nice job

[Alexis]

I'm stunned. :3 This was a really lovely piece of poetry. I can't exactly put into words my thoughts on it! But it truly was beautiful. There was a lingering image in my head if what was going on. It's so painful, but yet it seemed hopeful. Gah! I loved it! You did a marvelous job with it. Much applause to you!

[Joiedevivre]

Our tears would serve as cures
For each others pain
And we would dance forevermore
Our sorrow singing along

Lovely... !