A Lone Prayer

Nothing to be taken seriously.

This beauty of your dark essence,

Hence, for I will call,

For I'm your servant,

In light and darkness

Forever trapped in fire and serenity.

In desperation I call, 

In desperation I need

For I am a lone creature, 

darkened by this world.

My Lightbringer,

I call upon you .

I ask you,for your allegiance,

I ask you,to extinguish,

The darkesst desire of light,

Thy I am, Thy for good, for evil,

Thy for eternity.

Reviews

[forevermore1218]

It shows that you are a very intense dude which is really cool 'cause not a lot of people can do that in a poem that well. I really like your style and hope to see more work like this and that your poetry has a major influence on other poets.

Keep it up!
-from metal head to metal head :)

[Winslow Des Totes]

This is incredibly romantic and obfuscous, though sweetly not depressing, which is incredibly difficult to pull off. The flow is gentle and soothing and the diction warm and inviting, though just a touch of heart ache and wanting. Great write Khal, you'll make someone very happy someday.

[♪The Girl Next Do..]

Great work! I usually don't like the old talk, what with the thy and hence, but this one really works! Awesome!

[R.A. Youngblood]

I like your dark imagery and it's very emotional and kinda painful to me.
You really expressed your feelings of darkness and sadness very well.
I specially like the last line!
Thanks for sharing..Keep it up

[Ellie Howard]

i'm very attracted to the vocabulary in this poem, i enjoyed it very much :)

[ChaoticSoul]

I love the contrasting images of darkness and light. They allow the poem to carry a strong structure throughout and convey this beautiful, dark sense of emotions. Very nice!

[Ascending]

Why did you delete this?