"Sounds"

"Sounds"   Sounds of the willow whipping in the breeze, Sounds of a poor man brought to his knees. Sounds of life as it goes passing by, Sounds of pain as a lost soul cries. Sounds familiar, dear and sweet, Sounds of hunger, no food to eat. Sounds of laughter as life walks near, Sounds of longing yet no one hears. Sounds so familiar, they cause a heart to break, A yearning sound for Heaven's sake. The sound of earth as she cries out, As her masses scream and shout. "Share this pain, or forget about me, My Savior's face, please let me see."   Written by Valentine    [ Under copy right ]

Reviews

[SmittyJas]

I hear the voice of my Savior in this poetry it's a wonderful thing coming across in the breeze. As God Blown first breath into man.

[Valentine]

Without that first intake of air, none would exist. Kathie

[Robert]

Well done Valentine you express your thought into words on this piece clearly,

[Valentine]

Many people say it is too quiet in the country...they just haven't opened their ears to listen to what nature is saying and doing around them. Kathie

[R Smith]

excellent Kathie, would make a really good prayer, I could see this plea to God as a call to send Jesus back to us and put the world to rights :)

[Valentine]

Richard, what people do not realize is that God is here, watching every bad thing they do. All will pay and that is sad. Kathie

[sereenaoutloud]

Love the reputation in this write it really works well and helps to covey the message!!
Great write kathie! :)

[Valentine]

Thank you for your kind words. Kathie

[Leslie Philibert]

The repeats in the first stanza make this very emphatic, well done !

[Valentine]

Thank you Leslie, I appreciate your input. Kathie

[wordman]

the last stanza says it all,great write kathie

[Valentine]

In real life, at the end, He is all we will be wanting to see. Kathie

[wordman]

you are right

[Coyote Poetry]

The strength of sounds.
"Share this pain, or forget about me,
My Savior's face, please let me see."
Last lines made the poem complete. Thank you dear friend for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Valentine]

Thank you John, always appreciate your comments. Kathie

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Kathie.

[andrew mitchell]

sounds good and bad. nice write

[Valentine]

When my nephew drives in from work on the second shift. His radio is so loud it about knocks me out of bed. He lives across the road. Kathie

[Perkele.7885]

Looks and sounds like a winner to me!

[Valentine]

Some sounds are winners, others hurt the ears, Kathie

[KWP]

I like it very much - the style the feel - but don't you see your saviour each and every moment in the now ?

[Valentine]

Not when looking at some news programs. Kathie