Needs and Desires

very heartfelt.. this one is.

I need to make love,

With a mind I can't get close enough to.

When I come to the door, board in hand,

Let's cruise to the beat of your frequency,

Of our frequency.

We'll pull speed-heated wheels to the grass

And I'll let you put your thoughts in me.

 

I need to make love

With eyes that see through the content of my being.

When I gently take hold of your face and let your eyes gingerly swallow mine,

Let's just see if your soul is as beautiful as it feels

Inside of me.

With this desire etched in me,

I will smooth over my vision with the wisdom of yours.

 

I need to dance

A dance of passion and urgency,

Of slow, liesurely intimacy.

With soft, steady liips in syncronization,

We can dance off of this earth.

Let's find ebb and flow in our movements

And become one.

Reviews

[Travis Lawrence]

This is quite zen, with an upbeat sense of soul, well done here. Although the title's a little cliche, not sure it does the poem justice. "Speed-Heated Wheels" maybe? That sums up the theme to me, because you take off from the first line and don't slow down.

"With soft, steady liips in syncronization," - very cool line, but a couple of typos, "lips" and "synchronization".

[Gray]

You're very smooth. You slip-in keywords without going overboard and still paint a picture of the sensuous side of your intent. This is admirable writing.

[A. Amos]

Feelings, passion and emotions are amazing in your write; I was lost in your wonderful poetry...keep writing my friend. This was Epic!

[Edward Beaman]

A passionate poem with delightful wording. The sense of yearning, frequently associated with longer lines and verses, is instilled in the reader with a seemingly gentle and short poetic structure which actually works very well. I like it very much.

[Steve]

Very well done.......

[zappy]

this is great very well done