Rage

Spiteful rage.

Raging tears your eyes reject

calm the blue tides I sail on.

They travel through my veins

and comfort my heart,

quenching its thirst for fire.

The rivers of tears rolling down your pillow

pool into the lake I bathe in.

I hope the tides never leave you alone.

I hope you forever sail in pain.

Author's Note

This is my first angry piece!! Please point out corrections and mistakes and help me blossom into a better writer! As always, thanks for reading!

Reviews

[benedict]

That was a really good poem. It sounded like you really meant it. I bet it probably felt good to write what you really feel, right? Well, I liked It, and I feel like I could really connect to the feelings your poem conveyed.

[Vasilees Sybissyl]

Thank you so much for this wonderful review!!

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Sadness and anger...i feel that here. A quiet rage perhaps....a brooding intensity.

The eloquence of your word choice does subdue your rage somewhat. But it is the quiet, fuming anger that is often the most dangerous kind.

I enjoyed the write. Nice work.

[Vasilees Sybissyl]

Thank you so much for this wonderful review!!

[Soumya Deouskar]

Vasilees, It is such an amazingly beautiful poem! Wow.
I loved these lines-
The rivers of tears rolling down your pillow
Pool into the lake I bathe in.

Keep writing!

[Vasilees Sybissyl]

Thank you for your beautiful review! !!

[Soumya Deouskar]

Beautiful poems have beautiful reviews, Vasilees!

[Alex Ware]

This captures the essence of schadenfreude perfectly with some nice elemental imagery - short but sweet

[Vasilees Sybissyl]

Thanks for this wonderful review!!

[apennylate]

The end was a bitterly abrupt slash to an otherwise smoother sailing of concocted seething... I dig it...

[Vasilees Sybissyl]

Thank you so much for the review, Silente! I'm glad you like it!

[apennylate]

A pleasure...

[Gee]

I think this more anger than rage. Rage would gave you gnashing your teeth, spewing bile, expletives....Well I think so.
Saying that a well penned poem

[Vasilees Sybissyl]

Haha, rage sounds, well, unpleasant to say the least. Thanks for the review!!

[Shasha]

Oh god Vasilees, these poem shows real pain. This is amazing especially the words and phrases you chose are flawless. This is a real beauty. Great poem!

[Vasilees Sybissyl]

Thank you so much Shasha!! I really appreciate your review!!

[Shasha]

My pleasure!