Winter

The ground half yellow with golden leaves,
beside cold, gray stone which thought of winter.
Like heartache does of frozen needs.

The wind blows gold and gray together,
until all that’s left to see..
Is the heartaches wonder of all that could have been.

As leaves cover all what the eyes have trusted to have known,
The path that seemed so secure and strong,
turned out to be just dead as stone.

As what seemed to be dead, whispering goodbye,
There it was, mellow as a blanket covering a lie..

How could my heart have forsaken me so much?
It told my eyes to see stone,
as sweet as a childs lough can touch.

Where the half dead leaves covered a dead belief,
It was Life itself which covered a road that carried me to grief.
It softly rustled with the wind,
a song within the dying of its means.

But when it fell in order to die,
All its purpose was to make space,
for new of its kins!

Even half alive..
And dedicated to die..
All life does is dying for another life.
Whilst what was dead can never die.

Reviews

[DoormanDan]

I am stunned by the beauty and atmosphere of this piece. You are most definately a talented writer. Your descriptions of winter is fantastic. Ithink i might have seen a typo though(forgive me if it isnt). As sweet as a child's lough can touch, you put lough when i think you meant to put laugh. Other than that, this poem is wonderful :)

[Clara Verde]

Heej :) thank you very very much !! and it's true it should have been laugh so thanks again ^^ I will correct it now. I hope you could feel the metaphor to a lost love too :) I tried to put the feeling into words. Feeling of anger, dissapiontment and sadness. I am so happy about your review and I will soon give back the favor :) hug!

[DoormanDan]

I could kind of feel it, the only reason i couldnt fully feel it is because i have never been in a relationship. But trust me, you succeeded in putting the feeling into words :)

[Clara Verde]

Haha :) thank you. I guess you are right then it could be hard to connect to the scenario ^^
Well maybe even better! :)

[iveltac]

I liked it. but what you need is a bit more rhyming.

[Clara Verde]

Totaly.. I always want to write as fast as possible so I spend a little time on rhyming. THX

[iveltac]

np...........

[prince digbani]

loved the manner you summerized your poem, life is all about sacrifice, one day we all like the leaves have to pay the sacrife

[Lizardo]

The last stanza sums it all up, what a way to finish the poem.
About the penultimun stanza, I see lost of hope there for some reason, but anyways this is a great poem!
I love this poem, and there are many great thoughts here

[Amber Lily]

Winter is always a reminder that we always get another chance. Even though everything dies, in the spring it is reborn. A great thought provoking write :)

[Tasfia Islam]

Ahh!! What a piece!! what a thought!! Really impressed... :)

[Clara Verde]

Thank you Anabelle!! I am glad you liked it