Purple Flower

A lover's duet

oh dark purple flower
tiny and strong
i write this song to you now
your freedom song

 

i see your scars
i hear your cry
i count for you the stars
you’ve got to at least try

 

menacing darkness
yet you’re still alive
my purple flower
on wings of music thrives

 

a quiet hope alive
in your weakly beating heart
it’s instinct versus faith now
and copper sacred salt

 

i see your scars
i hear your cry
i count for you the stars
come on baby let’s fly

 

im a purple flower
tiny but strong
a melody moves my heart
my freedom song

 

you see my scars
you hear my cry
you count for me the stars
i know i’ve got to try

 

clouded in darkness
i fight to stay alive
this purple flower
on wings of music thrives

 

a quiet hope alive
in my weakly beating heart
it’s instinct versus faith now
and copper sacred salt

 

you see my scars
you hear my cry
you count fpr me the stars
take me with you; let’s fly

Author's Note

Honest opinion on rhetoric and content is appreciated.

Reviews

[Arabdha]

"it’s instinct versus faith now.." this one's my favorite line..the poem is different and could symbolize so much..i like the write !

[Willow]

This is a bit random in my opinion. It has that feeling of something that was only put together for a good rhyme. It definitely sounds nice, although your use of rhetorical language is a bit mismatched and basically all over the place. It's a solid poem though, and I look forward to reading more. You have much promise :)