Wrong & Right

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Bleeding mascara drips from his eyes
disbelieving he's been loving a lie
everyone's in on the joke
poor Adam commits suicide

Dorthy wishes to be thinner out of her mind
coming in at 98 pounds at age 29
she doesn't eat thinking she will lose more
poor Dorthy's slowly committing suicide

Shots fired coming from behind the counter
Wills bleeding on the floor in a deep pile of red regrets
listening to his cousin thinking they can get away
with robbing the gas station now Will lays to rest

simple and true we all have to decide
which way is which
and what's wrong and right...

Reviews

[FJ Davis]

Gut-wrenching, primarily inner-city images. No residents of Pleasantville, here.
Keep painting the disturbing pictures, Cordell. Who knows?--it might change someone's course; someone you'll probably never meet.

[Crowley]

It is so very difficult to map out that route that is both fulfilling and responsible, and this piece hits that nail right on the head. What is it about the self that eludes us every single waking moment of ever day. Great writing, loved this.

[Ruth]

Poiganant piece! What is wrong or right, different interpretations lead us all to different avenues I guess......powerful imagery :) xx

[Voice]

Everything you said here is so true. Powerful message.

Voice

[Vincent Esprit FMI]

Cordell you have captured one of the more basic aspects of life....to choose right from wrong.....too many lifes have been lost because of wrong choices....excluding the accidents.....thanks for capturing this fact of living.....blessings