ALL IN

Sometimes things shimmer

and you have to know why,

like the way water lingers on rocks

at the edge of a mountain brook.

It catches the sun a hundred ways

and you are frozen in delight.

It is best to learn a new place

deep, rather than wide, like

on that shore when you visit the

beach and do not understand until

the blue green waves wash you in,

time and time again;

your belly becomes the rumbling surge,

and you are ground into

the white sand and purple coquina.

Free-falling from ten thousand

feet is my measure of new love,

I am prickled with a torrent

of hormones, mouth open in a

silent wail…

I can step too near the thought of you

without words and am tied by the very

sinews of the Earth, and thus to your

muscles and bones, so when our fibers

get tangled and our sweat becomes one

by the side of a mountain brook,

or on a lonely shore,

our vision can narrow time to nothing,

and we are the only thing there is.

Reviews

[Arti]

I feel now how you write is a trend of writing that overpases the fb Instagram sites. I think you should teach me how to develop this way of writing. This depicts me your nature of heart to express. This was the reason to develop my writers castle I think now I hav to develop the site redesign it to make venting of our pain and sharing happy moments. Now I learning how to develop website I will redesign my site again.

But to be Frank I am zealous of your poetry with zeal to write like you, you being my shakespeare who taught me how to write sentence of poem changing the actual structure of sentence Subject + verb to verb + subject .

Thank you,
Jessy Jacob.

[Vol]

Jessy,
What is your first language?
Vol

[Arti]

Hi, my first language is Telugu, 2nd hindi and 3rd english. Why you are asking is my language bad.

[Vol]

Jessy,
I can work out what you mean, but I'd have to say some additional practice would not hurt your syntax. I understand that English is the hardest of all languages to learn.
Vol

[Arti]

Hi,
I tried to practice but I forgot easily the new words. Very few words I remember. My grammar is better I feel, with complex sentences, I know it's not that bad. Actually I don't put so much time in taking to write poems. I just randomly and thoughts keep on coming. May be for special occasions I will put efforts. By the way how are doing? You write very well with nice vocabulary. I don't read any books, I have interest in Reading but inner conscious stops me in reading.


One sincere don't vent too much of your feelings. Too personal things we write. When I start writing based on one thought, my lines keep on running in my mind.

Based on your poems I hope you are not investing too much time on writing. Kindly don't.

Take good care to sleep well, that willmake you to work more.

Jessy Jacob.

When I was in college I don't know how to exaggerate my description of writing, but I can think more. Only imagination and vocabulary I need to focus.

[Kelly Scheppers]

Gosh, Vol. I felt like I was free falling from ten thousand feet, especially after reading your closing stanza. "I can step too near the thought of you without words...". Tom Petty is nowhere to be heard, and yet I am free falling! What poetry!

[Vol]

Kelly,
Oh, my... Thank you! sigh.
Vol

[Lorry]

This, although unrelated Vol reminds me of driving through the north of Scotland where heather grows freely. So much so that there is a purple shimmer all around it, like the colour wants to seep into the trees and bushes it surrounds.
It is a stunning site, which must be the cause for many a crash as drivers forget they are driving and rubberneck like they are out for a stroll.
It makes the viewer feel connected to everything around them, but as I said if drivers don't keep their eyes on the road, they very well might be connected to more of the scenery than they wish and be sauteed with the nearest tree that gets in the way of their distraction! 😃

[Vol]

Lorry,
Only Poets and Madmen see the shimmers...
Vol

[Betty Hermelee]

I feel like the only way to experience adventure or nature is to live it! To dunk yourself into everything so you can get the best experience possible.....don't just look at it, go for it... immerse yourself,..... even in relationships...don't just stare...go for the gold!!! Become one alone under the moonlit sky....
Great piece Vol
Warmly, B

[Vol]

Absolutely! and if ya don't have the emotional fortitude to have your heart broken, ya just don't kn ow the value of pain... Suffering produces endurance, endurance produces character, and character produces hope... Romans says something to that effect in chapter eight, I think...

[Betty Hermelee]

My distinct pleasure Vol….🌷
Warmly, B

[Ms claws]

I'm here to do a return review: First, I was attracted to the title, "All In" for obvious reasons.
I am staring at all those colors in the mountain Brook. I've seen those blue-green waves and the frothy tips of those crashing waves. Oh the way the sand pulls me into the depths as I dig my toes in as deeply as possible to prevent being washed out to sea! The rest is too personal for me to comment. Well done, sir.

[Vol]

Thank you, I value your input! I lived near the beach all my life, and an afternoon spent wrestling with the sea riding waves to the shore and back out for more... there is only one thing in all of life I know that compares to the breathless exhaustion afterwards...
Vol

[Vol]

BUT, doesn't refer to anyone in particular...