My Reflection

I stand in the darkness
Staring into my own reflection
Frozen in sadness and fear
At what is looking back

My reflection shows
A distorted smile
Of a mad man
Laughing at the idea of death

It shows circles
Underneath cold, dead eyes
Of an uprising psychopath
Who has finally snapped

Am I a monster
That all around me see?
A monster that I fight
So others won't hate me

It's like all the good
Is locked inside of me
Reaching through cold bars
Reaching into eternal darkness

Was it all the years
Of being casted away
Like a monster
That made me one?

Will this reflection
Be my fate
Or will love
Save me from myself?

They say that women
Have ways of healing
Broken hearts and souls
So why not mine?

Or am I destined
To turn into a vessel
Of pure hate
That can't be saved?

Last in a fight
That I cannot win
For all hope has perished
In this lonely battle

If someone can love
Such a torn soul
Then maybe I could win
Against my darkness

Reviews

[Alana McGuire]

They say love can set you free. ;) hahah But seriously, I like the honest approach you took with this. I've read a fair share of mirror poems before, and I always enjoy getting a feeling of what each individual feels when coming face to face with their reflection.
You have a nice way of making this flow in short stanzas that say just enough to make the reader feel captivated by your personal thoughts about yourself. I've never been able to write in short stanzas very well, so I really admire people who have the talent. :)

[Ian Faraway]

Haha. Thank you. When I wrote the poem I was pretty happy it came out in short stanzas. I hate writing long ones because I know it bores the reader but, for some reason, I can't get my thoughts out without making long stanzas. Thank you for reading and reviewing. -Ian

[Cassie]

beautifully worded. I enjoyed reading

[zainul]

There may be a savior for you to respond to your appeal for love.
I appreciate your amazing approach that may transform a very rude one to love you.
This is an epic write.
Congratulations,Ian!!!

[Ian Faraway]

Thank you, zainul, for taking the time to read and review my poem. I'm glad you enjoyed it! -Ian

[zainul]

You are most welcome.:)
I could see flickers of light coming out from your lovely poem.

[Ian Faraway]

I always aim for the reader to get a glimmer into my own life and view it through my eyes. I'm glad you saw something.

[zainul]

Your aim is very perfect.
I appreciate your positive approach.

[Denise]

I have felt this way many of times. Maybe it is human nature to question our goodness our battle of good vs. evil. When we have been hurt our instinct is to fight back but what makes us human is to question that. great poem.

[Ian Faraway]

That was very well put. I didn't consider that part of us being human was questioning if we're good or evil. Thanks. -Ian

[shallimarRose]

"It's like all the good
Is locked inside of me
Reaching through cold bars
Reaching into eternal darkness"

Ian this is well written but heart wrenching to read.. We all see different things in ourselves and wonder what others see.. I hope this is just dark poetry and not a true self portrait,,, huggs, shallimar

[Ian Faraway]

Well it's how others view me based on my...social awkwardness that I grew up with. But it's true that I battle constantly with myself about who I am and what I will become...Ian

[shallimarRose]

Ian.. we all have ghosts.. We all look at ourselves as a critic... You look quite young.. Your whole life is ahead of you. You ARE a poet.. focus on that ... Try writing in the light instead of darkness... I will always read if you let me know you post something new. xo Rose