Pain and tears

Getting hurt and being mad

All I feel is pain and more pain, my hearts state
Makes it too hard for people trying to repair the hurt
All I feels is pain and more pain, my hearts state
Pain, pain, pain, and tears, tears, tears!

Left the trust in your hands, with a little hope
But my hope went up in smoke
F**k the plan of no revenge
Cause the s**t is in my hands and only mine, so maybe think again before hurting the people around you

For what it's worth this is your warning
Once,twice but oh not a third
Then no changing my mind you go and live a nice life

See I'm a nice person but you hurting me turned me to Satan
I'm hungry for this revenge I'm starving
Hurry up with the f*****g up, I got some revenge waiting

Reviews

[ROXANE DORSEY]

I have experience such pain and it hurts. this is a very nicely written poem thanks for sharing

[Einstein Noodle]

whoa!!! you are a dangerous person ;) things that stand out to me are: the need we have for someone just to sit with us in our pain..not try to talk ... give advice ..nor fix anything...just to sit and shoulder even a small bit of the pain we feel ..that wound is at its worst upon being inflicted and stays open for as long as it takes ....before we can even imagine taking a step or two forward ... the second is the anger so vividly stated in your poem ..it is the first overriding emotion we have when taking those steps ..and has to be dealt with before the next step or two ..there is a brutally honest approach to "Pain and tears" that brings me into the experience in an intimate way ..so well done says i!
E.

[Wannabewriter16]

I'm glad my writing can bring you into the experience.

[wordman]

i`m sure a lot of people can relate to this write,
it causes a lot of pain

[Paul Bell]

So I'm thinking this guy upset you then.
Got a feeling, he's a dead man walking.

[Wannabewriter16]

Lol well yes and no. It's more me writing like it happened to me but not me. Someone I know.

[Paul Bell]

Okay, contract cancelled. lol

[Karen Redburn]

You captured the need for revenge very well in this poem. Those feelings that naw away at the mind. There are a few places you can smooth this one feel free to message me if you would like additional help with grammar or typos. Cheers!

[pia]

i like the concept and the idea portrayed. i could suggest you improve on the rhyming and grammar in a few places by re reading it. im not so good with poems however this was an interesting read

[Wannabewriter16]

I plan to add more to this eventually