Vanity, My Love.

Look in the mirror

Bloody and broken features

Describe your vain face

Reviews

[theking]

I always have a difficult time dealing with haikus, probably just because they are so simple. However, the smaller the work the higher quality it must be, and I hold that standard for all haikus. I feel as though the topic is fantastic for writing a haiku on, although the correlation between "bloody" and "vain" just isnt there for me. I hope im not being unclear, but I feel as though bloody could have been replaced with a different word that is more fitting to the theme. In any other poem, the distinction wouldnt really be important, but in haikus every word is so important I just cant help to notice it.

Other than that small anomoly, everything else seems to be on par with a great haiku. Just find a different word and youve got yourself a masterpiece :)

Keep up the good work!