Truth and Lies

a train of feelings dissolved in rhymes.

Everytime I heard the name...
I would feel the same...
I would shut my eyes...
to rinse the truth from the lies...

 

 

I met the fact that you were gone...
And how desperate have I grown...
To believe I have been right...
To think I could stand firm and fight...
When I was really falling apart...
And it was ripping my heart...
To realize I was left alone...
To sit by that stone...
By your dust and your bones...
with your memories and flashes...

 

 

Now I see how it all crashes...
How it burns down to ashes...
And falls into random pieces...
O, how harshly life teases...
Aperson who had lost...
The one they loved the most...

Author's Note

I'm not so good with poetry. I just arranged a few rhyming words one after another. *shrug*. Comments? Reviews?

Reviews

[Deviant Works]

This is really good. I am one of those people who have lost the one they loved most and could relate to this poem. I am very glad I read it for many reasons.

To realize I was left alone...
To sit by that stone...
By your dust and your bones...
with your memories and flashes...

Amazing writing! And so true. Broke my heart reading this.

[qaralynn]

beautiful and sad poem..great work!!

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good poem. To lose a friend leave us sad and disappointed. The poem told a sad story. I like the strength of the poem.
"And falls into random pieces...
O, how harshly life teases..."
Life can seem unfair. But thank to internet. Can always keep your friends.
A excellent poem.
Coyote

[nono]

It's horrible the truth and lies! The truth hurts, but when you find out that someone is lying. It's just a loose loose situation. You did a nice job on this!

[Melody-Rose;]

You're a great writer, I love the flow and emotion of the poem.

[Mauricio Montoya]

what I get from this piece is someone who's not being truthful about their feeling for you or willing to make a commitment. you always have to remember poetry it always open to interpretation. nevertheless I think overall you did a great job. Keep on writing.