Choked

the words vanished from your mouth

and were forced into mine

I choked and I couldn't breathe

and you watched what you were doing to me

 

its in your blood

you're a bad guy

what doesn't kill you

feeds your hunger

you gave me a necklace

with your initials

and I loved

how it choked me

Author's Note

Not sure on this one- please let me know what you think!

Reviews

[rubie]

i find it hard to believe that there are no comments/reviews on this wonderful piece yet.

I love how you have juxtaposed the usually-panicked feeling associated with choking with the imagery of love and gifts.

The structure of this piece is quite clever. You use the second stanza as a turning point between the panic in the first stanza and the love in the third.

This is an interesting and evocative piece.

[Alex]

Thank you for sharing your interpretation on this piece, its really helpful and engaging to me. I love your thoughts on the juxtaposition- your kind review is much appreciated!

[rubie]

Wasn't quite sure about my "take" on this piece. Just wanted to convey what I saw. Every reader brings his or her own experience to each piece and no two readers will see the same thing. That's why I am against the notion of trying to figure out what a poem "means" because the meaning varies according to who is reading it.

[Alex]

I quite agree, we all interpret differently- I like the variety in that!