Castles and Moats

I could build a castle on your winks and smiles

a moat with your illusions
I would kiss each of your delicate ribs

and worship you with seclusion

 

but castles always decay and crumble

and moats just go round and round

but im sure I will still worship you

whilst you run me into the ground

 

 

Author's Note

Please let me know your thoughts on this~
Alex

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked this poem. The honest and direct are very good. Easy to be twisted-up and accept being ran over for the need of another. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Alex]

Thank you!!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Stephen]

Very short, pacted with meaning. I like it. Thanks for sharing

[Alex]

Thank you Stephen!

[Stephen]

No problem friend

[Emily]

Short and sweet!
Well done!
Keep it up!

[Alex]

Thank you Emily!

[Saddam]

Touching and lovable. Great write dear poet.
Love the way you expressed it.

[Alex]

Thank you Saddam for your lovely compliments!

[Mayank]

I love the way you have build the plot, the love which is unconditional stay like this. This was like beautiful spiral staircase.

[Alex]

Thank you for your kind words Mayank, I love your ideas on this!

[Ashwin Thakur]

Just creation at a hearttouching best
The choice of words are better

[Alex]

Thank you very much, it means a lot!
Better than what?

[Ashwin Thakur]

Better than mine actually surely way better
U can read my poems too

[Alex]

Don't compare yourself to others and put yourself down! We are all different and write differently- I will make sure to check them out!

[wordman]

a great love poem,building and planning thinking of how to capture that love for ever

[Alex]

Thank you for your thoughts wordman!