Cadence

Cadence

Little soldier boy march on.

March straight on into the dawn.

Left. Right. Left. Right

March head on into the fight.

March on, little soldier boy.

March onto that plane, ready to deploy.

Forget the tears that trail down your lover’s cheek.

Forget the child who, for you, shall always seek.

Forget your family and all their scars.

Forget the city lights that twinkle like stars.

Little soldier boy march on.

March on into the dawn.

Embrace the torrential, tormenting and timeless sand.

Embrace the rationed food that tastes so bland.

Embrace the blistering heat of the summer sun

For, little soldier boy, your time has just begun.

Thunderous flames explode from the ground.

In the red river humanity is drowned.

Gunfire hits your brothers like rain.

They lie with red uniforms in the sandy plain.

March on soldier boy.

Carry your brother’s loss with a face of stone.

Do you recognize that reflection as you?

You've changes as too many do.

So soldier boy march on.

March on into the dawn.   

Reviews

[Bright Ocean Star]

WIR, this is beautiful and powerful, and something I can identify with all too well. My son is that little soldier boy and he's joined the Marines. Thank you for this write. I'm saving it into my favorites. I like the rhythm and the meter. The flow is perfect, and I wouldn't change a thing. Great write.

[WhereItResides]

I'm glad you enjoyed it! I salute your son wish nothing but the best for him.

[Bright Ocean Star]

Thank you. I loved this one so much, I had to come back for another visit. Thank you for writing and sharing this one with us. :)

[Anne Timmins]

Surprisingly predictable as a read, as far as content goes. Also, you might rethink using rhymes. To use them with effectiveness, you must also attend to the matter of syllables, metre, flow and line count. Rhyming for the sake of rhyming, as I suspect you have done here, does not good poetry make.

[WhereItResides]

To figure out the use of rhyming you only need to look at the title of the poem. I have made the mistake of rhyming just to rhyme, but this is not one of those times. Thanks for the review! Sorry it wasn't you cup of tea.

[Sami Khalil]

A wonderful poem indeed. The message was superb...Bravo.................

[WhereItResides]

Thanks for the review! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)...................

[Frieda P]

Sad and powerfully emotive, tugs at the heartstrings. Tough subject matter which you've written so eloquently.

[WhereItResides]

Thanks for the review!

[Frieda P]

Was my pleasure...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this is quite good and very important in its theme...i was almost drafted to Viet Nam...several of my friends weren't as lucky...and they came back very different...very affected...if only we could put an end to these wars...there is little humanity in what they embody.

powerful...one of the first protest songs. "soldier boy" by the shirelles..."i'll be true to you"

but often that changes...because of him being gone...but also because he may come back a different person.

[WhereItResides]

Thanks! Nam was just one big mess. it just confounds me when people actually start calling for war, especially when they call them for pointless reasons. It seems that they just don't understand ho bad it truly is.

[Rij 'rose]

Nice theme!
Not everyone will get ready to become a soldier.Wondered what inspired the little boy to become the coourage little soldier boy!
'the face of stone' stuck me.

[WhereItResides]

Thanks! not everybody truly understands what being a soldier means.

[Emily]

I like the story! Well done.

[WhereItResides]

Thanks a lot!

[Misha864]

You doing good :), I THINK it would sound great with the music on behind:) I ♥ the way you make rhymes :)

[WhereItResides]

Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it.