Facing a wall and a storm cloud

Facing a wall and a storm cloud

head first reactions

blank oblivion

thundering reminders

that standing still

can break the will

of even the best foundation

when water forms puddles

and you fail to notice

that it is you who are crumbling

 

 

Reviews

[Ruby]

The rhythming is perfect in your poems . I like that

[Alani]

We are the foundation of a relationship... when we crack and crumble.. it all comes down!

[willweb]

Yes, that is the truth. And when that foundation crumbles it is not a good feling at all. Thank you my friend.

[Shirlena]

I like this poem as it reminds me of people who are in some type of distress. These can be the one who recognize it in every one else except themselves and one day they hear someone screaming and they realize it is them.

[willweb]

Once again you are correct Shirlena. You nice words were fun to read today. Thank you once more.

[Madalyn Beck]

Boom! That last line is what did this one! I could see and hear everything in this short write, but once I hit that last line, everything in my mind shifted.

Brilliantly penned, Will! :)

[willweb]

Gee whiz!!! Thank you so much Madalyn. I am happy you enjoyed this poem. Thank you again.

[lissalovesyou]

The last line hit me hard.
Wonderful.
Indeed, some people do not notice that it is they themselves "who are crumbling."
lissalovesyou:)

[willweb]

Thank you very much Lisalovesyou for your comments today.

[Vidya Bacchus]

You write so profoundly Will.You always leave me thinking.This is so great :)

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Vidya for coming by and reading and commenting on my poetry. You are a good friend.

[Vidya Bacchus]

No worries Will.It is my absolute pleasure,You are welcome :)

[Cory Barrett]

this is just great! i love the images of a puddle crumbling a castle. its the little things.

[willweb]

Thank you so much my friend

[Lyn Anderson]

This seems to be about relationships, but also about oneself. It is easy to stare at that wall blankly while life just happens and you fall apart.

[willweb]

Thank you so very much KLGoode. I am excited you liked this one

[s y e]

Wow, you are extremely talented... Your writes are so powerful. You leave me speechless, I love the message in this one.

[willweb]

Thank you again for reading my poem Noodlehead. That is a funny name.

[s y e]

Haha, it is, indeed but it's me.

[Aethereal]

I like the lines:

"that standing still
can break the will”

If we fail to adapt to changing conditions, then we fall prey to oncoming storms. Water erodes mountains. Life is a dynamic process, and as such it’s a moving target that’s difficult to hit.

[willweb]

Thank you for reading and commenting on my poem today Aethereal. You are correct. It is difficult to hit.