Blinded Sun

A dark cloud

escaped from my mind

one day while thinking of her

 

Hovering overhead

making my shadow invisible,

if it were even there to begin with

 

Looking up and seeing nothing

but grey swaths dripping, I wondered,

why does the sun never see me cry?

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Soren]

Will I read this for the content primarily. It seems to have such deep meaning and feeling with so many unanswered questions that leave the mind returning over and over in quest of answers. I particularly like the middle stanza that evokes an image of no sun in one's life to cast a shadow and then the line "if it were even there to begin with" leaving me questioning if hippieness was ever present or even deeper whether there was ever a person to cast a shadow. Then the last line "why does the sun never see me cry?" A very lonely feeling.

[willweb]

Thanks Soren. Just a dreary time in my life that I tried to write out of me. I guess it worked. : )

[Soren]

Glad to hear it.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

I fall back to the moon again...just a reflection of that burning sun.Man, she really took it all....

[willweb]

Yep, she sure did.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

I've been there...I thought I was lost forever... didn't even have any more tears...and then the poetry came... don't get me wrong...it didn't recognize me or even heal me....it has had a hand in the recreation of me though...I used to be told that I was the dark side of the moon...now I have a shadow in the sun:) Write On!

[Matching Socks]

Because sunny days, chase the clouds away...
Yes, I am quoting Sesame Street but to be fair, I learned a lot from that show that has really stuck.
Like the alphabet...

[willweb]

I don't remember, how did they pronounce Z on Sesame Street? Thanks so much Ana. Your comments mean so much.

[Matching Socks]

Zed... Rhymes with dead. :)

[willweb]

And bed...just saying. :)

[Matching Socks]

And head...

[willweb]

and thread...like in invisible. :)

[Alani]

The sun reminds me of a passionate ball of fire... so it would not want to see you cry (and neither would I).. x

[willweb]

Your nice words today have caused the clouds above me to disappear and the sun to shine brightly down. Thank you Alani.

[s y e]

See, that's quite a good question... why does the sun never see us cry? I think this with the Moon sometimes (I adore the moon) but never thought about it with the sun, until now.

This is beautifully written, Will.

[willweb]

Thank you once again Noodlehead for your great comments on my poem. It just seems that way at times. I have a fondness for the moon as well.