Supper club confessions

Before me rests
dirty linens in folded seams
seeking someone to pay the bill,
as I am questioned,
who are you?

Table settings in disarray
scatter my thoughts
in creme brulee stains
and lemondrop martinis wasted
as I look up

Falling to the ceiling
I find my world upside down,
drifting in twisted chiffon
corned by chandelier earrings,
feeling this beauty engulf me

Floating within lost dreams,
undeterred by the din of the dinner crowd
slowly exiting with full bellies,
memories keep me aloft
as what was once down is no more

Gazing below to the rows
of leftover dishes and sorrowed silverware
I now know the answer to the question,
Who are you?
I am nothing without you

Reviews

[Alani]

In the beginning all can be shiny and new... we tend to put up a fake "appearance" to be accepted... in the morning its all exposed.
I am enjoying the way you write. It's so simple and easy to follow and read... not complicated at all!

[willweb]

Thank you again Alani for you nice comments. Yes, you are correct, but sometimes we wake up the next day and are pleasantly surpised. I am excited you enjoyed this.

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

Comparisons and feelings meeting each other inside your writing. Losing and feeling it. Dreams crushed and broken when others don't live up to expectations.

[willweb]

Thank you so much Joise again for your nice comments on my work.

[Vidya Bacchus]

This is so sad Will.We take things and people for granted and it is only when they are not there any more that we truly realize and appreciate what we had and lost.I love your poems they always touch me deep :)

[willweb]

Vidya, your nice comments have touched me deeply. Thank you so very much.

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome Will :)

[icelandicblue]

I love your comparisons of the two polarized scenes. We do not often appreciate the moment and those we love until they are gone. The bleakness of the scene was palpable.

[willweb]

Thank you Icelandicblue for your wonderful comments on my poem. Yes, you are correct and it is shame it is that way. Thank you again.

[Moonie]

of leftover dishes and sorrowed silverware 
I now know the answer to the question, 
Who are you? 
I am nothing without you

These are 4 absolutely brilliant quotes of this wonderful piece. I love the ending. It couldn't have ended in a better way. The concept of including something as trivial as food to convey the love sickness of the central character was frankly amazing.

[willweb]

Thank you so very much for your nice comments on my poem. I am so happy you enjoyed this and found my meaning.

[s y e]

Will, this was fantastically well written. The last two lines made such an impact. I am agreeing with what everyone has said here, Will. Wonderful job.

[willweb]

Thank you so much Noodlebumble (?) for your comments. I am happy you felt this one.

[Einstein Noodle]

love the floating ... taking in the whole scene from a disembodied view .. very creative metaphors of life in disarray on the table ... and the people leaving .. who are they?? though you have answered the question for yourself i agree with KL .. there is something missing and not quite right about "I am nothing without you" in this poem ... cant put my finger on it ... i hope it is obvious that i really enjoyed reading and reading again .. thanks for sharing this!
E.

[willweb]

Thank you so very much E. for commenting on my poem. It does seem something is missing and maybe it is something missing in me. Happy you enjoyed this one.

[Lyn Anderson]

A lovely soft and sad piece, and even though I have my issues with the thought of "nothing without you" this is an emotionally impactful poem. I did notice however, ceiling is missing an i

[willweb]

It seems you are correct. I have corrected the mistake. Thank you for finding it and pointing it out to me. Thank you for your comments KLGoode. I am glad you enjoyed this.

[A. Amos]

of leftover dishes and sorrowed silverware
I now know the answer to the question,
Who are you?
I am nothing without you

Simply amazing piece if art and above lines were superb!

[willweb]

Thank you for your comments on my poem A. Amos.

[A. Amos]

You're most welcome

[Shirlena]

I love food but I have terminated my affair with it and have committed to eating sensibly for two years now but the experience of dining out for me will never be passe' which is why i love this poem. You can't beat the ambiance and pleasure of having good food and service catered to your taste for an hour or two especially if the company is good as well. This poem has great ambiance too.

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Shirlena for commenting on my poem.

[Shirlena]

ur welcomed.