Drive-thru Love

Based loosely on a "Take out food" conversation with Ance

That voice, almost heaven

I sit in my car enraptured,

as if a song is being sung

only to me

She speaks as an angel

on silver spun cloud

watching me from above,

protecting me

 

So melodic is her tone

from this lighted box

of gaily colored clowns

and circus animals

listing the specials of the day

that I can feel my heart

about to beat out of my chest

as I place my order

 

“Please drive to the second window,”

she purrs and I can barely breathe

“Yes my beautiful princess, I shall”

Pulling up to the sliding glass

I see her, golden hair, blue eyes

Just as I imagined

“You are beautiful,” I tell her

 

She hands me my bag, we touch,

her skin like porcelain

“I’m in love with you,” I whisper

She hands me my change,

the coins fall from the most

delicate of fingers

"Thank you, come again," she serenades

“Don’t forget me” I sigh as I pull away

 

Reaching into my bag it now dawns on me,

I should have said, “Don’t forget my fries.”

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

hysterical twist to this....i love the fantasy you create...and it made me smile...one of the best super bowl commercials ever..for Pepsi.

the guy places his order through the intercom...the voice comes back all static-y as usual....
then when he gets up to the window to pay...and it opens, the guy really sounds like that...

but i really enjoyed the hell out of this drive-thru ride...

[willweb]

Thank you so much Jacob. I didn't see that commercial (don't no how) but it sounds great.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i laughed for ten minutes straight, just couldn't stop...it hit my funny bone so hard.

[Lyn Anderson]

Very funny. I have to say, one day last year, I pulled into a drive through in the wee hours of the morning, and the boy behind the speaker told me I was "the most beautiful woman he had ever seen" -- while I highly doubt that to be the truth, it did kind of make my day -- thank you for reminding me of that moment. As for the poem itself, the best part about it is the clever juxtaposition of the mundane mixed with the romance. And even with a twist! Bravo.

[willweb]

Thanks so much KLGoode for this wonderful review of my poem. I'll let you in on a little secret, that boy behind the speaker was me. :) "Do you want cheese on that?" Sound familiar?

I'm happy you liked this one.

[Lyn Anderson]

Ha ha very funny, and yes, cheese ONLY please.

[Matching Socks]

:)
OMG
Will this is great!
How could you have forgotten the fries!!!
Seriously? That's why you went!

[willweb]

And I wanted curly fries at that!! Thanks so much Ance. Happy you stopped by.

[Matching Socks]

That's a tall order at a drive through window... :)

[willweb]

Maybe I should have stuck with a salad. (No nuts)

[Matching Socks]

Lol. Maybe... extra bok choy.