Cloudburst

 

A steady downpour

finds me wishing

I had forgotten my umbrella

For drenched is what

 I long to be,

in my memories of you

raining upon my heart,

cascading through my mind,

saturating my dreams,

drowning my desires

and washing away my happiness

 

The sun breaks through the clouds

and I remember why I brought it

Reviews

[Mauricio Montoya]

never thought rain could be a good thing until I read this.
Great job

[willweb]

Thank you so very much for this nice review.

[Cassie]

Love the imagery here...good job

[willweb]

Thank you you Cassie for bringing a smile to my world. I am happy you liked this one.

[Rita L. Sev]

Those memories sting after a while... really great imagery here, Will.

[willweb]

Thank you so much Rita. I am thrilled you liked this one.

[Ally Monique]

"and washing away my happiness"
I guess sometimes pain and hurt can be addicting.
I love the title of the poem and the works of the poem as a whole :)
I like the roll reversal of the umbrella as well.
Great stuff here!!

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Ally for this nice review of my work. I am happy you enjoyed this one.

[Shirlena]

Awwww , the umbrella was there all along but in such concentrated sadness it didn't matter if it rained down on him...he probably barely felt until the sun arrived. How lovely.

[willweb]

Thanks so much Shirlena for taking the time to read and comment on my poem. I am happy you enjoyed this.

[Cory Barrett]

really clever bit. I love the reverse roll of the umbrella. good stuff

[willweb]

Thank you Cory. I am thrilled you enjoyed this one.

[Einstein Noodle]

i can hide in the rain ... out in the open but still unseen .. or so one thinks ... i remember those times in my life .. :(
E.

[willweb]

Thank you E. for always being so nice to me. I am happy you liked this one.

[s y e]

A bit of pathetic fallacy here, me thinks? You have some stunning imagery here Will. You blow me away with every single line.

[willweb]

Thank you so much Noodlehead. You are always so nice to me.

[Ruth]

Ah, the use of water with emotion always makes a stunning and moving poem, gorgeous x

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Poppy. Your nice review makes me smile.

[Frieda P]

Oh I like this a lot Will, actually I love it...from first word to last. Like how you came full circle here, and 'saturating my dreams, drowning my desires'...is stunning.

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Frieda P. for your nice review of my poem. I am thrilled that you enjoyed it.