Monochrome opposite

What seems black and white,
common as -
piano keys beneath nimble fingers,
candle shadows dancing on an
opaque drawn blind,
blurred highway lines dotted
on fresh asphalt -

is really the reflection of my racing pulse
upon pearl painted skies
every time you walk by -
in living color

Reviews

[willweb]

So colorful my friend, monochrome is just simply not you. You are a spectrum of colors, and through those colors you can paint, poetry, and play music... always on high level. I thank you greatly for this poem.

- Elisa

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Elisa for this nice reveiw of my poem. I am thrilled you liked this.

Always my pleasure Will :) you know I love your poetry!

[Madalyn Beck]

This is beautiful. I really enjoyed this. Life is not complete in just black and white. That one person who brings color to your life is a person to keep. Beautiful! xo :)

[willweb]

As long as that color is not red. :) Thank you so much Madalyn for being so nice to me.

[Madalyn Beck]

No more red. Done. :)

[Jonas]

The writing is indeed a powerful one and for one thing, it flows so nicely and doesn't go all crumpled. However, I feel like there's something missing, like some detail or more colour. I don't know, but there's just something that needs adding.
Hope this helps!

[willweb]

Thanks so much Jonas, kind of a hazed line between color and drab is what I was going for, but I will re-look at it.

[Jonas]

Always in your service.