Falling

 

 

I watched you fall,

spinning out of control

on a gusty northern wind

beneath clouded skies,

twisting and turning,

eluding my outstretched hands

as I tried to save you

from those who had fallen before

piled in silent thoughts,

returning to where they began,

but I was too slow

 

You watched me fall,

you didn't try to catch me  

Author's Note

Just barging into the leaf challenge...

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

Ouch. More than leaves, the hearts that fall into the abyss. The poetic voices that go silent here. Those of us who watch the chaos...
I'm no leaf, no tree, just resolute stone beneath the feet of the masses.

[Rene Salinas]

Inertia is a strange thing. It says that unless we interfere the motion will continue indeterminately. But what it has been done here is clever. As Inertial has nothing to do with the organic movement of the season. Yet Willy has managed to make me feel responsible for that damn leaf falling and as if before touchdown I would have thrown myself down to catch it.

Stupid human ignorance always interfering with nature. Yet your skill still makes me feel responsible.

Great emotions displayed here all the best with the contest!

Thankyou

[willweb]

Thanks so much Rene for this in depth review of my work. I really enjoyed your take on this.

[Baby Ricochet]

This is oddly sad with some great imagery. Hats off for this one.

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Baby Ricochet for your visit and kind words.

[Ma'at]

this is so sad and beautiful...very nice xx

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Robbers

[R Smith]

nice leaf challenge poem, at first i thought it was a kite but i got there in the end, thanks Will :)

[willweb]

Thanks so much Richard. I guess it could be either.

[MsJewel]

Sad and bittersweet. I love the soft flow of your words, almost as if a leaf is falling slowly...drifting on an autumn breeze. Beautiful writing Wil
:) Julie

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Julie for your kind words.

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

The first stanza flows beautifully and reminds me of a leaf floating in the wind...
The second stanza is a rude awakening and is over quickly.

[willweb]

Thank you so much Josie for this nice review. I am happy you enjoyed this.

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

You are welcome, always!

[therisa]

Sigh...............life can be cruel, at times.

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Therisa.

[therisa]

Your welcome, Will.

[Confuser]

I really enjoy your writing. You are very clever. Thank you.

[willweb]

Thanks so much Dale for this nice review. I am happy you liked this one.

[Confuser]

I loved to be surprised in writing. And you do it nicely. Tks.

[Lyn Anderson]

I love it, very clever take. Send it to Realmwriter.

[willweb]

Thanks so much KLGoode. I really didn't want to barge in on his challange.