Will you

If I fall will you catch me
make everything fine

Will you hold me so close
for the rest of all time

Will you whisper I love you
in poetic rhyme

If I fall will you catch me
forever be mine

Reviews

[Falling Leaf.]

Sweet and simple. Falling in love is a gamble. Good luck to you, sir. Thank you for sharing this treat of a piece!

[willweb]

Thank you so much for your kind words.

[anne]

If I fall will you catch me
make everything fine

Will you hold me so close
for the rest of all time

Will you whisper I love you
in poetic rhyme

If I fall will you catch me
forever be mine..............
its rhyme like a song....so sweet and beautiful...:))

[willweb]

Thank you so much Anne. Like I told John below, I was singing it in my head before writing it.

[Matching Socks]

If you fall
I will catch you
I'll be wait-ing
Time after time

Reminded me of that song.
Of course she'll catch you, if she doesn't then I will. :)

[willweb]

Then I won't worry about falling ever again. Thanks so very much Ana. What about that whisper part..if she doesn't will you...hey, it doesn't hurt to ask. :)

[Matching Socks]

Nice try though...

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ok I will be brutal Will. I like the sentiment and the romance of this piece but I think you have fallen into the trap of rhyming to rhyme?

[willweb]

Hey it happens every once in a while. It was something that found my mind and I wrote it out. I was actually singing it in my head. :) Thanks John.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like this...the theme is about taking risks with love....okay, i will fall, make myself vulnerable and see if you catch me---for the speaker's sake, hope it is the right whisper.

[willweb]

You and me both Jacob. Thanks so very much.

[Writingislife5]

I really like this poem, especially the last line great job

[willweb]

Thank you so very much.

[Corset]

"I'll hold the football" :) (says in best Lucy voice) Why do I get the distinct impression of that old game "trust" where one person stands with their back to the other person, arms open and falls backwards trusting the other one to catch them before they hit the ground? I hope they catch you.

[willweb]

Thank you Corsett. Trust is a big part of everything, especially the feelings of the heart.

[Corset]

That is true Will.