Shadowing the promises

 

 

And the darkness comes

on a sunlit day, reaching with its hand

of little comfort or warmth

Shadowing the promises

of ribbon shaped clouds

floating silently in harmony

with my heartbeat

 

My mind drifts softly,

gazing through this high rise window

streaked in sadness

but transparent so that I may see

into the fabric of my memories,

desperately fighting the fears

as a slight smile forms

 

Collecting teardrops…

so many shed, flowing anguish

embedded of a loss

outlining the cracks in my heart

etched in tomorrows

now lost to yesterdays

when today I miss you again

Reviews

[Ana B.]

Love the title, and the words.....damn....left me hanging :)

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Ana B. I am thrilled you stopped by and left such kind words.

[Rita L. Sev]

Melancholy beauty in these verses, Will. Well penned.

[willweb]

Thank you Rita for your kindness.

[R Smith]

My God! that was good Will, straight into my library, its so sad but has that air of beauty that seems to flow from your pen, great writing :)

[willweb]

Thanks so much Richard (he says as he sneaks in a week late)

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Love is a strange thing. Sometimes we're happy, sometimes it makes you sad. Very well done, Will. :)à Rudi

[willweb]

You are correct my friend...a virtual roller coaster ride at times. Thank you so much.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

How divine, romanticism strikes me hard about the ears, nose and throat, well done, great read.

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Thomas for your kind words today. This one was written from a deep corner of my heart and it hurt a bit to write. I am happy you stopped by.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Your very welcome darling, it shows, the depth in which this was written, more darling, MORE.

[MomzillaNC]

So romantically melancholy. And, lovely, lovely, lovely.

NOTES: Maybe increase the font size.

[willweb]

Thanks so much MomZ, but the font size is part of the overall feeling.

[MomzillaNC]

OK. yw

[anne]

It is such a beauty...Always their are lines which tugs at heart, make one feel so awesome....
but transparent so that I may see
into the fabric of my memories,
desperately fighting the fears
as a slight smile forms........
so beautiful..........:))

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Anne. I am happy you liked this one.

[Baby Ricochet]

Quite a good melancholic piece you've crafted here. Good work

[willweb]

Thanks so much BR for your kind words.

[Lizardo]

This poem really touch my heart, and specially the las line...
you are a talented writer and I see this poem clear in it
What a wonderful piece you have here

[willweb]

Thanks so much my friend. I am thrilled this one touched you.

[Lizardo]

You are welcome

[Cool Girl]

Wow. This was a bit sad... I love it though! You are such a talented writer:)

[willweb]

Thank you so much Cool Girl. I appreciate your kindness.

[Cool Girl]

Welcome! :)