The Wishful Dream

Just something for bonus in English a few years ago. It's based on a child's hopes in wishes. I once had color, but after the vanishing of the writings...I'm too lazy to try to dublicate what I once had.

A wish on a star

On a coin

As a thought.

A hope for what may not be.

A strong faith

In the unknown

For the unseen.

Unfailing fath keeps hold.

Thoughts whirl

As emotions clash.

The heart feels heavy

With the hope it contains.

These dreams are made known

As a falling star appears.

Friends laugh

They cry

They sing.

Strength is sought

In friendship's bond

That helps achieve

The lifelong dream.

Reviews

[*** Hey Jude***]

I like the transitition that you have made between a wishful dream and a life long dream. The main ingredients that you use are great. Hope, faith friendship, laughter all important! very nice~ Jude

[T. Jones]

I enjoyed reading this poem. It reminds me of my childhood, and how much I always loved making wishes at fountains... It also makes me remember laying under the stars with my best friends, wishing on stars. We would ask each other what we wished for, and then argue when no one was willing to share the secret..

I liked the flow of the poem, and how you changed the color of the font to represent transitions in the poem.

This was a great read. Thanks for sharing.

[Michelle Ross]

This is such a wonderful piece of poetry. I have three children so I have seen precisely what you talk of here. That endless well of hope they have, and how easily they can cry. The faith that comes so easily to a child. I have seen it. It's a shame we don't keep more of that as adults.

I didn't see any grammar or spelling errors. I love the flow of the poem and how you use different colors and font sizes. That, to me, just emphasizes the poem's message.

Overall, an excellent piece that I hope you received a good bonus for.

[Alejandro Manuel Espino..]

Cute

I always harp on how a poem is presented, and you did a great job on this. The poem is attractive and makes you want to read it. Good job. I think my favorite part was

The heart feels heavy
With the hope it contains.
These dreams are made known
As a falling star appears.

I feel that recently more than ever. Thumbs up!

[Riverdance]

I like this, B. Pretty colors that really suit the mood of each line in turn. Can't wait for you to add some of your other works!! =) Bonus projects really do speed up the inspiration process, eh? ^^

[Bill Grimes Jr.]

This is wonderful......The colors match the emotional weave.........Well done......

Peace,

Bill