The Girl

just playing around again.....

Emotions all a swirl,

Do I love that girl?

 

Like the gentle curl,

Of waves upon the shore,

Might I love that girl?

 

Our hearts begin to twirl,

In a timeless dance,

Could I love that girl?

 

Like a precious pearl,

Beautiful, yet strong,

Yes - I love that girl.

 

Should my pride unfurl,

She keeps my rage in check,

How I love that girl.

 

As my passions whirl,

I simply love that girl.

Reviews

[Manda]

well i totally changed my mind about this piece! i absolutely love it now! its so amazing i dont know what i was thinking before i read this but i just love it now! its so cute and sweet! well done

[qaralynn]

really sweet..love it

[Samantha]

simple, sweet, and relaxing. I enjoyed it! Great writing!

[T.S. Rex]

I found this very relaxing and the repitition wasn't too overdone or pointless. I usually would hate something like this, but it made me smile on the inside. Very good!

[Manda]

i enjoy this. but i think it used i love that girl to much. it was very well written and emotional and cute. pretty good =) very descriptive

[deeps]

This is so wonderful, Very lovely Liked the flow a very enjoyable read.

[Stephen Scaggs]

The repetition in this poem is something a reader like me doesn't come across a lot. I like this poem because of not only it's repetition but you're writing from your heart. You use the -irl to rhyme most of your words. Is there any rhyming with the "shore, dance, strong, check?" Thanks for sharing! 9/10.

[Shannon]

Elegantly beautiful wording. ^_^
The repetition really ties it all together very nicely.
Excellent job!

[LeeLee Ryder]

A sweet & lyrical journey
Oh she must be some girl..
Thanks for sharing.
LeeLee