I'm fine

So yeah, me.

"I'm fine." She typed as blood dripped down her wrists. 

She puts her arms around her friend, but not for them, for herself. 

She smiled big and bright, while inside she was crying and waiting for it to end. 

She doesn't know what she's waiting for, and she doesn't want to anymore. 

She'll do anything for somebody to make them smile, but nobody can help her. 

She doesn't want anybody to know that she's suffering, but she can't take it anymore. 

She hides in her room because she's afraid to be seen. 

And she is me, and this is who I am. 

Reviews

[Lord of mad men]

Wow deep this speaks truely of the mind set one who wishs to beloved but is not and hides that fact would be in. I can tell your speaking from experience. Life is well it sucks thats is that. I have thought of the same thing just not for a means to end it. Just to feel something but i a guy so i really dont bleed from the wrists. I use both my mind and body to feel anything at all but that has changed some what with finding some who can understand me and why. With out feeling sorry for me or saying i need help. So yeah this was a very deep and beautiful piece. Thank you so very much! Yours truely a mad lord

[duff]

This is gut wrenching and beyond painful but can relate on so many levels. It takes balls to write it down and put it out there so I tip my hat. Thanks for sharing

[Gregory Stires]

this poem has some real depth to it. i can relate in a way that i usually tell people im fine because i dont want to burden them and all. although this is usually towards my family since i feel like i cant trust them. well except my sister. i usually end up ranting to my friends to deal with the overwhelming emotion that i hide. overall i think this poem is lovely with its nice format, its subject, and the emotion that was put into it.

[Cody Jeremy Thompson]

The first two lines were really impactful and they overshadowed the rest of the poem a bit otherwise it's a neatly constructed poem,well I expect nothing less from you.

[Silent Wolf]

Thank you so much for all your reviews of my work. :) It makes me very happy knowing that people actually want to read my work, even though it's not the best of the work out there.

[Cody Jeremy Thompson]

Well it is understandable that a person won't write some pieces that rival classic literature right of the bat but I'd gladly assist people who are into writing. Note that I tend to be more cynical on Thursdays and Mondays.

[Silent Wolf]

That's alright. Thank you for the warning. Also, thank you for willingly assisting me. :)

[Cyndy Robinson]

I am female, I loved the I'm fine with blood dripping down her wrists. I have "the intonation for that". used to do performance poetry. You know we females have a way of saying I'm fine, and unless your deaf blind, dumb and stupid you know we aren't.

[Silent Wolf]

While that is true, sometimes it's really that we are honestly fine.

[Cyndy Robinson]

Most of the time we are really fine. Agreed. And every writer has their own perspective of what they wrote and why. But good wrighting can mean many things to many different people. I think you have captured that here.

[Alice14]

This is me as well. You wrote this perfectly in third person, i loved the turn at the end, it relates to so many people.

[J3ssInJupit3r]

This is what is called "codependency" I didn't know this until I was sent to group therapy after my melt down. When you are constantly going out of your way to make everyone in the world happy and not focusing on you, it takes a toll on your body because you aren't giving yourself the attention that you deserve. (Even if you don't think you deserve it). You give and you give and you get nothing in return and you sit there all alone wondering why you give so much if no one wants to give back. This is the life of a codependent. It hurts, and I am sorry that you have to endure this. I wish I were not codependent. But that is why I can relate to this poem. I enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing and I hope that you can stand up and fight this codependency better than I did. Good luck to you friend.

[Silent Wolf]

*hugs* Thank you for enlightening me. I never knew there was an actual term for this. I hope that you are soon able to find help as I have.

[KittyKatgirl]

There is some of your writing I've read but never left a review. I guess they left me speechless and I didn't know what to say lol. I'm so glad that things have gotten better for you even though sometimes things take a wrong turn again. Honestly there's nothing more I want then for you to b happy for the rest of your life. This is a great piece and I loved it. Great idea about making it in third person then revealed at the end that it is you.

[Silent Wolf]

Lol. Thank you. And yes, it can be hard, but it's only a bump in the road. *hugs* I would love for you to be happy as well.

[KittyKatgirl]

*hugs* Thank you. I read J3 review I never knew there was a term either lol. I guess I'm condependant since I can relate to this poem.

[sarah jane]

Heart wrenching. Very emotional and raw. well done to you and thank you for sharing. I feel I can relate which is comforting.

[steppenwolf]

Hello Silent Wolf and Brother to the Steppenwolf: I am a big fan of honesty and you are a wonderful writer in that way. Very visual, all kinds of images come to mind. Thank you.