TRIED TO STITCH IT

Tears of sorrow, try to fix it

Sorry’s never been enough

Took his thread and tried to stitch it

Tender heart has grown too tough

Wish I would have caught him in it

Twinkling seas of twisted lust

Talking to me just won’t fix it

Should have thought before he touched

Preyed on innocence to have it

Perversions are his private hush

Took his thread and tried to stitch it

Should have sewn his own mouth shut...

Reviews

[Bala Gorthi]

The message is very loud and clear, Misty.
When someone preys on innocence the act can never be forgiven the act itself becomes inhumane whether is small or big, in word or deed because the intentions are malefide. What you wrote as "Talking to me just wont fix" is very right and plain enough.
A very nice write.
Thanks for sharing.:-):-):-)

[M. L. F.]

Thank you very much Bala. I'm glad the message got through to you. :) Thanks for reading my work. :)
Misty

[Ruth]

There is such a tension to this piece...tangible...nicely thought out :)

[M. L. F.]

Thank you Poppy... I like the work to be as real as possible for the reader. Poetry is not really a skill for me, so if they are halfway decent, that is means I'm improving, if even a tiny bit. :) Suggestions from seasoned poets are welcome :)

[richy]

I'm going to play Elise here and tell you to capitalize your "i"s lol. Great story fit into such a small poem. I like your minds response to his confession being that you wish you had caught him in the act. It would have made much more sense for you than dumb words being sprayed from an un-sewn mouth. I felt a nice bit of insight into your moment. Good job homie.

[M. L. F.]

lolol... Yes richy, good interpretation. On the nose. Also, I figured out that if you read this on a pc / laptop then the font all looks big / capitalized... but if you are on a phone etc, then the I's look little and odd lol. I write on microsoft word in a special font, and then copy paste them here, and thus the I's look little, while in my font, they look big lol Guess I have to fix that ;) Thanks chicken hawk :)

[richy]

God bless the nickname "chicken hawk"

[M. L. F.]

Hahah.... yes..

[M. L. F.]

Ahh.... Fixed the I's... Now it is all the same size, on phone /IOS version's as well. :)

[richy]

Ask someone who has a ssamsung galasy if it's good before you go to bed

[M. L. F.]

hahaha, ok... Have to find someone with one first :0 But I think it is all one size now, the font, all caps. :)

[A. Amos]

Tender heart is grown to tough...you're an amazing writer and this whole read...especially this line...mind blowing my friend!

[M. L. F.]

Thank you very much..

[Blackheart]

The rhyme scheme you used here is indeed commendable. I loved how the poem slowly unfolded signifying the guilt of the protagonist. The essence of sorrow is also beautifully expressed. Loved the last line! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the poem and I really liked the ending.
"took his thread and tried to stitch it
should have sewn his own mouth shut"
The above line. The wish for the most of us. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[M. L. F.]

I'm glad you understood it... Thank you Coyote

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.