Foolish and Forgetful

I wrote this a little while ago and forgot to type it up and submit it. Well here it is :D

Open arms welcome you
Seductive and calm
Poised as hidden jaws

A dense heart never learns
Striving for warmth
Fish swimming toward the shark

This webbed hole
Built just for you
Looks so beautiful
You keep coming back for more
Heart forgetful and scarred
When it's all you know
It's all you're going to get

Circuitry shorting out
Programing corrupt
Unable to restart

Serrated hand outstretched
Grabbing your wrist
Tearing your flesh
Idealistic heart forgets

Heart desperate and scarred

Reviews

[Katherine Wyatt]

There is so much here that is incredible.. "Serrated hand outstretched"..the circuitry being broken.. ~beautifully executed...and heart aching...

[Meredith Leigh]

I love how your writing is so vivid and descriptive. It flows so nicley, but still has that story behind it, and I just love poetry like that. Great work!

- Kriss

[Markymark]

Hi Wunder. Beautiful ink. Goes without saying. The fifth stanza: should read "warmth" right?
and the fourth from the bottom should read serrated. This piece grabs you from the start and keeps you reading to the end. It definitely has a sharky feel to it. The metaphor is strong and well received with the words.

Can't wait to read more.

markymark

[GailAlexander]

The imagery in your poetry is very powerful. You are very skillful in your use of contrast. You describe "toxic" or co-dependent love very well. I enjoyed your poem. I am glad that you found and published it.

[Mrs Diva]

Really nice! Clear and on point. I like it! Thanks for the review!