Photo in a Frame

I wrote this after my ex-wife left. Every couple as that moment, the picture that captures the soul of who they are as a couple. Well, I was left with only that photo.

No words I write can ever say,

how much I miss you everyday,

as time goes by the loneliness grows,

how I miss....nobody knows.

I think of you in silence,

I often speak your name,

But all I have are memories

And a photo in a frame,

No one knows my sorrow,

No one sees my pain.

But the love I have for you,

Is in my heart and mine to keep,

I have never stopped loving you,

Nor do I think it's something I could do.

Deep inside my heart,

You are always with me,

Heartaches in this world are many,

But ours is worse than any.

I think of you so often,

I occasionally whisper your name,

But all I have are memories,

And a photo in a frame.

No one sees my weeping,

No one senses my pain.

My heart still aches as I whisper low,

"I need you....and I miss you so",

The things we feel so deeply,

Are often the hardest to say,

But I can't keep quiet anymore,

So I'll tell you anyway,

There is a place in my heart,

No one is can fill,

I love you and forever more will.

Reviews

[nocool]

Read a few of your things now...
I can tell when, what i believe, you have an emotional attachment or moment.
Those are my favorites...

Very good dude...
Great stuff..

[Angelia]

Beautiful. You tied the poem together very nicely. I liked the way you repeated some of the lines in different words. You certainly portrayed your message strongly but you delivered it delicately. Great work!

[Xander West]

I often repeat stanzas with different words, or slightly different meanings. I appreciate you reviewing my work. You are too sweet.

[Angelia]

No problem, I might have to use a few of your tecniques in my own work. I'm such a new writer, it's a pleasure reading different styles and developing my own style in the process.

[Xander West]

I can relate. new and exciting....

[Rebecca Pall]

From the first line, I was hooked. You hold the amazing ability to suck people in until the very last punctuation mark of the very last sentence. I was able to feel all of the emotion that you express in this work, and I think that is a really beautiful ability.
A job well done, and take a look at some of my new works when you get the chance :)

[Xander West]

Thank you Rebecca. There was quite a lot emotion at the time of the piece. I will read some of your work. I promise.

[Rebecca Pall]

Thank you very much. Keep writing, you do an amazing job :)

[Xander West]

Sometimes I lack the ability to edit my work as I first write, I simply prefer to get lost in my work, letting my passion of the moment draw me into another world, escaping the chaos of the life we live. I probably could go back and spend time on this to make it better, however I wrote the piece right at the time my ex-wife left me. I now enjoy going back to relive the moment, I know that sounds crazy, but we learn from pain and mistakes. I learned a lot at that particular time of my life.

[Dehrania]

The first stanza is great, the rhythm and everything...again it's a bit disrupted because of the long verses...you can say none, instead of no one and you can use "," instead of "but", "and" etc...A poem can be a bit grammatically incorrect if you know how to put words...you have talent and feeling, so keep writing...and read poems, they will help you understand what i mean :)