Crawling

Spiders

Crawlers

closeing in

biting

crawling

moving closer

twitching

legs and eyes

battering

snipping

knawing at your soul

Reviews

[The Perfectionist]

It's short.

What? You want an actual comment? Fine. "Closing" not "closeing". "gnawing" not "knawing"

If you were going for creepy, you just missed it. It's too bland to evoke actual emotion and there are lines that just kill any momentum you had (legs and eyes, moving closer). The one word lines are your most effective.