Daisy

Childrens poem

Daisy

Lazy, daisy

Sometimes crazy

our big fat cat, 

with a funny looking hat

taking her time, to meow and whine

lazing around on our chairs

all the time.

lazy, daisy

Sometimes crazy

jumping out of windows

way to high, landing on

her feet all the time,

Big and fat

she still chases the rat

Lazy Daisy

Sometimes crazy

takes her time to come

and cuddle, sometimes

with the kids,a struggle,

Lazy Daisy

Disappears to have her

babies, underneath the house

we find, a bunch of tigers

having a whine, 

cute and fluffy

little bundles, under daisy

who looks real crazy

comes and says,

MEOW

Reviews

[Sourav]

Sweet! And the reading was a real fun. It's good that lazy Daisy still chases the rat! :)
Nice work.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

What a cute and fun write. I like the lyrical nature of the piece, and the meter and rhythm was actually rather well done. I think that the best writing comes from what we see every day; what we experience in our own "realities".

Technical note:
2nd stanza 4th line: "way (too) high..."
Last stanza 7th line: capitalize "Daisy"

Overall, this is quite a nice little poem. I like the imagery and the way that you worked the wording.

[Revery]

Great fun write. Nice

[Potter]

Very sweeeeet! I love this.