my nightmare are coming true

my night mares are coming true..

my nightmares are coming true

once again we are finally through

you tore open my heart

and you tared me apart

my nightmares are comeing true

you fell in love with a girl or two

but not me, for im not new

you seem to not have a clue

bout how much pain you have put me through

my nightmare are coming true 

once again we are finally through

you tore open my heart

and you tare me apart

my night mare have come true.. 

Reviews

[manifesto]

The rhythm and rhyme add to the message of the piece, and once again, a beautifully sad poem!

[13ReasonsWhy]

i loved it!! so much feeling and emotion!!

[rae52]

good but tared should be changed to tore you could also change tore but only if you want to
in the last one you either need an s on nightmare or to change are to is
last line you need an s on night mare or to change have to has
last line second one needs an aphostrophy (excuse my spelling) or bout or to be changed to about

sorry i sound do critical over all it is very good but it is better to change the things now before you screw up something important like if you sent it to a publisher

[Shy Girl]

Sleeping at night after a moment such as this...can't even begin the description. You did a very good job of breaking that time down. Of being direct on feelings of hurt...betrayal and broken inside. I like the directness you have wrote in your poem. Sometimes you just have to be brief with emphasis. :)

[MetBySunlight]

I like the flow and rhyme to this poem. I also like the way you repeat the title in your words.
My favourite part:
'my nightmares are coming true
you fell in love with a girl or two
but not me, for im not new
you seem to not have a clue
bout how much pain you have put me through'

[paradise]

Nice ryming skills have hope stay strong if this is about you. :0 I loved this writing sometimes people should be more appreciated abt things nightmares come true too much for alot of people

[~ Stefanie ~]

I loved the rhyming scheme you had for this! It made for a perfect flow. Great job!

[Summer'sBreeze]

i love how you made it fit to the rhyme, very beautiful

[Thea]

Wow...I really love the rhyme scheme here...
A very beautiful and emotional piece...
You did great here...
:)))

[JRB]

Nightmares are at times premonitions from the soul, warnings to the heart and a messages to the awakening mind. nice write