I love you,but you love her

let me know what you think. i hope you like it.

 

You say you love me. You tell her you love her. Well I do love you,but you love her. You do not really love me, you really love her.So stop saying you love me. I am tired of the lies. I am tired of the bullshit you put me through. I am just plain out fed up with everything you do.

Reviews

[.nicole.]

I was first drawn to your poem by its title. The title reminded me of some of my work. The general idea was really good. Try putting it into separate lines instead of just one long thing. It will help with how you want it to flow, how you imagined the poem flowing when you wrote it. On the upside i could really feel the passion you had when you wrote this poem. It was very good. Check some of my poems out please.

~nicole