Doubt

Bleh...

Somewhere between the moment

You looked at me…

And that single second

                When our lips met once more,

 

I lost myself.

 

                Somewhere between the moments

Your hands found my body…

And the seconds that passed

                When you touched my very core,

 

I forgot myself.

 

                And somewhere between the moment,

You set my passion free…

And that eternal second

                When I could take no more,

 

I found myself…

 

Wondering

Why

You were here

At all...

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice flow of thoughts and words. I like the final thought in the poem. No weakness in the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Emrick]

This is nice.

[Adora.xo]

Thank you kindly :)

[MoriartyMesa]

A gent by the name of Bill Withers, came up with something better than I may conflab,

[Sami Khalil]

A splendid read and write...Thank you for sharing...:)

[Adora.xo]

thank you!

[Sami Khalil]

MY pleasure...:)

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

That was powerful and beyond relatable for me. I have attempted to write about this very thing... your wording and structure was brilliantly done!

[Adora.xo]

Thank you very much! I'm glad this touched you as it did, and that you liked it :)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

It was very much a pleasure.

[The Lone Wolf Prose]

Wow...just wow...Last line was like a punch to the gut...
Loved it.

Wonderful write

LW

[Adora.xo]

Thank you kindly!

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T..]

Whoa! That is a most perplexing ending! A wonderful poem but just so complex and befuddling (to me). Is this the way it is, was, or will be? It pricks at the edges of my sensibilities in a unique way that I've never before encountered. Where did you get the inspiration for this one? No matter, an excellent poem.

[Adora.xo]

Well it's a complicated story behind the inspiration to this poem... a long story. But I'm glad you liked it :)

[Clockwork]

Well, I like the twist at the end. It makes me ponder a few things: At that stage, our lovely speaker has gained the confidence and the vision to question why she needs him or the way he treats her. Conversely, maybe she is still questioning why he would want to be there after she found herself. I prefer the first possibility more, I'll admit. However, I still like how you draw this piece back to finding her identity and what she stands for as a person and a lover. That is my favorite part of this piece.

[Adora.xo]

I'm really very glad that this poem spoke to you so well! :) Thank you kindly, for the read

[Clockwork]

You're welcome :-)