The Boxed Rose

A poem

You have boxed the rose,

And each time you tear a hole.

But today I wonder,

Have you lifted it?

Or have you just torn it some more?

 

You have closed the door,

And everytime you open it a bit more.

But tonight I wonder,

Have you finally opened it?

Or just let in enough light to make me sore?

 

I have finally felt it,

And everywhere I look you are there.

But now I wonder,

Am I really here?

Or is this an illusion at which I stare?

 

 

Author's Note

Um Let me know what you think, it's free verse so bleh.

Reviews

[ChristianM]

Maybe I'm not awake enough but this confused me. lol
It was beautiful and elegant but I could not make heads or tails of it.
It made me think of a girl not being loved by someone she was in love with.
Probably wrong though. heh
This is why I rarely write poetry. haha

[Corvus]

I love the repetitive scheme, and the way you describe torture, yet still the hope of enjoying it, but still a sense of wonder and curiosity. It's hard to describe, but it's lovely. Well done.

[azlamalo]

I love the last two lines of the second stanza..its awesome

[Dutch Jr.]

At first I was in the same boat with Christian here, but I read through it a few times, and here's what I came up with:

Hmm.. I think when you say boxing the rose... you're talking about some form of containment... maybe being in a dead-end relationship... you know, like when girls have those possesive boyfriends, and he's, in a way, closing her away from the world, like locking her in a box. Maybe I'm wrong, and I probably wrong. lol

[Drew]

Good imagery in this I liked it a lot and it gave me a few good ideas for myself haha.

[Crowley]

Very original analogy here and good crisp lines. This is the first I have heard this subject matter protrayed this way and I really think I like it. It takes some disecting but I think I get the general idea and it is beautiful. Great Job sweet.

[Michael X]

Free verse is an amazing style of writing. You have captured
the flow in train of thought. you have talent, keep it up!

[Angel Veselinov]

It it great and a lot of emotion in it :) very nice i loved it :) Thanks for sharing