When I See You

Bleh hehe

Love, when I see you

Every cliché seems to come true.

And when I feel your fingers laced with mine,

Everything freezes right there in time.

Dearest, when I hear your voice,

My heart seems to have no choice.

And when your sweet scent touches me,

I know a dream this cannot be...

Because every cliché seems to come true,

Sweetheart when I'm with you.

Author's Note

Let me know what you think please ^.^

Reviews

[Fuzzy_Poluzah]

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[Warick Ten Bohmer]

I personally think the poem would end better with the same lines it started with. Just feel that "Baby" sort of ruined it for me, then again that word is pretty much used these days as a cliché so in terms of the technique it fits in with the poem to that degree.

Other than that I've got to say it's tops! :)

[Liza]

adorable :)

[David W Moore III]

very sweet and as matthew said , cute, but I like it. It captures that heady skip and run feeling of the first stage of love

[Matthew Kult]

Hello Adora,

Very lovely and cutsie. A soothing little love tale. Excellent work.

Regards,

Matthew

[Dream Weaver]

Short precise and lovely...
Beautifully written...